Dear Foot Locker,
I have been an avid shopper at Foot Locker. I have enjoyed the variety of shoes that you offer. However , ever since the new raffle ticket system, I haven't tried to purchase any new shoes from Foot Locker.
Last year, when they announced that the Bred IV were being released during Black Friday, I was very excited. Until it was announced that is was going to be raffled. Disappointed that it was being raffled, I had to wait for people to resell them for way more than retail. I really disagree with the raffle system. The raffle system is easier for resellers to resell shoes for more than they are worth, which is really big problem in the sneaker community. Also sizes are very limited. I am a size 9 or a size 10, the most popular shoe sizes. Which means it's a small percentage that my name will get selected to pick up shoes. And finally the sneakerheads community is really close. The raffle ticket also helps workers hook up their "homies" with selecting tickets.
I feel like Foot Locker should do a better job with handling how people get released shoes.
You need to revise, you don't give enough information in the letter. Your intro is very week and transitions from topic to issue very poorly. You also do not explain your opinions at all, you need to tell us why it is easier to resell things, and how is it easier for workers to "hook up" their friends. You use to much slang or casual talk within letter. Also you don't give enough understanding on your side. Meaning you need to talk about that you understand why they moved to raffling tickets but that you are still unhappy with it. You also need to provide an actual reasonable solution. AS(1-)
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